Sunday, September 16, 2012

Transit of Venus


R.A.D. Stainforth ... radiant in his black and white world ...

Venus-transit,
come full spectrum,

radiate voluptuous,
without the slightest discoloration;

enough to chase away all blandness
and the blackest of dogs.

Step out of monochrome
to highlight small things;

the scent of stray fingers,
poison lips that hum

the sound of summer,
roam shy smiles,

with the most wild
and orderly interplay.


tk/September 2012


Venus and The Sailor, 1925, Salvador Dali

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41 comments:

  1. Beautiful, Tess. I especially like:

    the scent of stray fingers,
    poison lips that hum

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  2. with the most wild
    and orderly interplay

    Sounds good to me... :)

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  3. def chased away any black dog today.....beautiful...x

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  4. step out of the monochrome...love that bit there...this has a wonderful flow tess...both in image and in sound...

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  5. H'mm, lovely. Jupiter, not Venus, is very bright at present but your poem put me in mind of it:-)

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  6. Just...stunning, I think. Yes, stunning!

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  7. "...the most wild and orderly interplay" - hmm, how can that be done? :)

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  8. I'd give anything to step out of monochrome!

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  9. 'Step out of monochrome
    to highlight small things;

    the scent of stray fingers,
    poison lips that hum'

    Love all of the movement in this. Before too long we will all be wishing to hear the sound of summer again.
    Lovely write Tess.

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  10. the scent of stray fingers,
    poison lips that hum

    Can be lethal with just plain humming! It appears so. Nicely Tess!

    Hank

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  11. Wild yet orderly ... an amazing contrast !!!

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  12. Hmmm...are you sure that won't attract the black dogs? Beautiful!

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  13. Transit of Venus .. step out of monochrome to highlight small things ~~ and to think this won't be seen again until 2117!

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  14. This definitely chases away all blandness...Yes!

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  15. What a wonderful dance life would be if we all ventured to "Step out of monochrome/to highlight small things;"

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  16. I'm with Lyn... no blandness here, no black dog either.

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  17. roaming shy smiles! good one, thanks.

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  18. the scent of stray fingers,
    poison lips that hum

    the sound of summer,

    Wow, this is sweetly evocative. You are amazing.

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  19. Step out of monochrome
    to highlight small things;

    Love that line. Great piece!

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  20. poison lips that hum: hmmm.
    сладострастный
    rel

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  21. This seems a most wise poem to me, Tess , thanks

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  22. Yes - love the wild and orderly interplay which describes the careful composition of the painting so well. k.

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  23. Definitely no blandness here!I love the sensuous tangle of words.

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  24. radiate voluptuous,
    without the slightest discoloration;

    enough to chase away all blandness
    and the blackest of dogs.

    BEAUTIFUL!...

    JJRod'z

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  25. The reading is so intriguing, so enjoyable to listen to! Wonderful addition to your written presentation, Tess.

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  26. This was very teasingly playful!

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  27. the scent of stray fingers,
    poison lips that hum

    the sound of summer,

    These lines captivated me.

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  28. I like this Tess -- we were of like mind on this prompt, though it burned a bit more graphically for me...

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  29. Beautifully resonant Tess love it

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  30. a concoction of wonderful ingredients in this poem.
    most so outside my own scope that I truly enjoyed it.

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  31. its somewhere in between the clock ticking in the back and the cigarette in his fingers.

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  32. Step out of monochrome
    to highlight small things;

    I think we followed your advice! :)

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  33. Woww wonderful.....every line is singing aloud...

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  34. you both get better and better. wonderful painting too.

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  35. Thanks for taking the time to stop by, read my stuff, and leave such lovely comments. You mean so very much to me.

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